[Konvas] Help !

[Speedbirdmgh at aol.com]

"_http://www.torontourbanfilmfestival.com/films/lost-communication_ 
(http://www.torontourbanfilmfestival.com/films/lost-communication) "

 
Zefred,
 
Nice little film. Nicely shot and edited and gets to the point quickly.  
Becomes obvious what she's looking for!
 
I liked the walk into the room but I think you needed a 3 second shot of  
her entering the hotel steps or lobby to establish its a hotel not "something 
 else"?  You chose your shots well and specifically wanted your actress to  
"look seductive". You positioned your camera in low positions to give your  
audience the idea that this girl is promiscuous by nature and not just 
bored. So  not sure what your message was to the viewer!!!
 
I really liked it and its premise of a lonely girl in a strange town with  
no one to talk to except by writing on the windows and other people in a 
similar  situation doing the same.
 
How about some sound.  Commence with hotel lobby, "Hello miss Smith"  
without image. Footsteps into room etc faded down. TV tuning problems sound and  
keep it running. Finish with sound of a car horn tooting and  her leaving 
her room in a rush. Its only my opinion and you can go on  forever.......
 
I loved it.  Well done.  What did you use to shoot it.
 
Rita  (you have my vote)
 
 
 
 





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